This picture shows two guys eating together at the park student union, even though this is a social gathering place there are not many people currently there around them. The one boy is not eating so he either has already finished or is just waiting for his friend because they have plans to hang out or study after. They might even be roommates hanging out after class getting something to eat. The boy eating has a lot of ketchup on his plate, which makes me think that the food is not that good, and he’s using it to make the food taste better. The colors in this dining hall are not very exciting or appetizing it doesn’t look like a place where you would want to hang out or spend a lot of your time. The blah colors make it feel cold and almost like a hospital cafeteria. If they added some artwork or color to the wall I think there would be more activity and it would be more visually pleasing. The two of them are dressed very differently the boy eating looks more dressed up in a button down shirt then his friend who is in casual attire. I think that they boy eating had to dress up for something to do with school either in a class or an activity on campus. For wearing that nice of a shirt he better be careful with all that ketchup so he doesn’t get it on himself and ruin his shirt. The guy eating looks like he’s laughing so maybe his friend just said something funny or he’s watching us take a picture of him.
This is a comment for your blog as a whole. Your captions were well written, but I think you need to add more analysis in them, not just describe what is going on in the picture. I think you focused too much on the action in the picture and the people, rather than the building itself. It's also hard to tell which photo is your introduction and which is your conclusion, unless they are in order, so an introduction and a conclusion could be added. Good first draft though!
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you related the PSU to what the people were doing in it as opposed to only talking about what it looks like. But I think you should relate the inferences you made about what the people were probably doing to the actual space. Also, I can't really tell which is the intro or conclusion. But it's a great first draft!
ReplyDeleteThere are a lot of detailed observations in your captions. You did a good with the details, but you mention a lot about the people, what the people are doing, and make inferences based on that. I would make more inferences and meaning out of the actual space. Why is the PSU a good place to get away? Why do they make the PSU so uninviting and not exciting? What is the deeper meaning?
ReplyDeleteYou’ve described the pictures very well. However you didn’t do much with analysis. It’s well written but focuses more on reiterating what is in the pictures than what that actually means.
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